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I am God’s Ingrown Toenail
Your paper has a good introduction topic, but you have not brought out the thesis of your article well. The introduction does not give out the argument. As I read through the story, I felt like there are a lot of details that should have been included to make the story more vivid about the life in the Christian community. In your introduction, one does not understand well the reason why you were grounded for a whole month and music taken away.
In paragraph 3, the writer has included a lot of questions that are rhetorical, but I have not understood his opinion towards the issues. Also, we did not know the reason why the parents separated. In paragraph 4 of the story, the writer has mentioned that he came across a book but hasn’t indicated what the book was called. Also, he does not say the content that he has read from the book and how it contributed to him changing his mind. He mentions that he came across a book and read it and it changed his life.
In general, the writer has written a beautiful story about his life in a Catholic community, but reading through it does not give enough content that will support his topic. There are a lot of details left out that still confuse the reader about the story the writer has narrated. Is it the life in the Catholic community or is it how the books he read changes his perception about God and the whole story about religion. Also, the conclusion was brief in showing the intentions of the writer and the full extent of how the literature material has influenced his life.

He should add the titles of the book he mentions so that we can know where he got his knowledge.
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I am God’s Ingrown Toenail